Hello!
Today I will be posting a sample resume and job application letter. Due to myself being bonded to the RSAF for four years upon graduation from the university, I have written them in foresight of my future experiences. Please feel free to critque and write your various comments on them.
Regards,
Watson
Job Advert:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sm7YYi1z2cRzedfvonR8EzCOcciNgW6xL6-vN5rKOMQ/edit?authkey=CLSw--AK&hl=en#
Job Application Letter:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sRziPEwPOXNZkiwKjbMoqz69qJe2IbeztxiSeNWKhhs/edit?hl=en&authkey=CO2K2vwK#
Job Resume:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NEP69sbeoVm9RFNqG93rEr3VOYzrktDyteNKsme0uJk/edit?authkey=CKLJ68wF&hl=en#
haha, its kinda late to comment right now, but well there is still time for you to amend your letter.
ReplyDeleteFirstly, i feel that your letter is quite lengthy. I suggest that you can refine your content and try to avoid like repetition to make your letter more concise. For example, you can pick out some of the events you organised to include in your letter rather than writing all of them down. Just include the more significant ones and leave the rest in your resume.
From your fifth paragraph
"I do believe that this job will be in line with my passion towards shooting. Coupled with my experience in the shooting arena, this job is certainly of my interest."
yes, you can see that this is an example of unnecessary repetition which will make your letter unnecessarily lengthy.
Just my two cents